Lets Try These Introductions Again..

This blog entry is about rewriting introductions. In class we are learning how to write introductions that really hook the reader and draw them into what you're talking about. So for this assignment we were told to forget about our original introduction, even if we really liked it and go ahead and write some new ones using the new skills that we have been learning in class.

After reading over my food paper I realized that my introduction just wasn't what it needed to be, so I did some revising. I thought to myself that there was a few parts that each introduction needed to be appropriate. I thought that each one needed to express my feelings about how I felt about Chocolate Companies, this way the readers will right away know what I'm trying to talk about in my paper. Talking briefly about my topic before actually getting into the paper will give the reader a little head start to whats ahead in the paper. 

Original Introduction

Chocolate is one of the most universal and sought after snacks to ever be consumed. The vast amounts of choices you can select from make it nearly impossible for one not to have a strong desire and attraction for this snack. Milk, semisweet, bittersweet, unsweeted are all varieties of chocolate produced by chocolatiers. Not only is there an incredible variety of types, there are a seemingly endless variety of brands.  Dove, Lindt, Hershey’s, as well as Godiva are four of the most well-known and sought after chocolates in the world. Although there are a seemingly endless variety of brands, it seems like every one tastes the same.

Actually when we were first assigned to rewrite some new introductions, I was not actually a fan of writing new ones but after some thought and writing I realized that I could use a new introduction so this assignment did help in the end.

Another Attempt on Introductions..

1. A seemingly endless variety and brands of chocolates make it nearly impossible for someone not to like chocolate. A vast variety of packaging ranging from different packaging styles and writing styles set each company apart from each other. However the difference in packaging does not mean the chocolate itself is different. All chocolates ranging from milk chocolate, dark chocolate and white chocolate taste just about the same regardless of what brand it is.

2. One of the oldest snacks known is chocolate. Since the beginning of time chocolate has been experimented with in order to produce different and more unique types to please consumers. Companies pride themselves in making a product that will completely set them apart from any other company. Aside from different types of packaging and such, chocolate does not range much and to many all chocolates take taste the same.

3. Chocolate is one of the most sought after and desired foods. To many, chocolate is a comfort food and eaten in times of stress. People go to the grocery store and stand in front of all the different brands of chocolate and think to themselves what kind they should buy. Well if you actually think about it, all of the chocolates taste the there really is no major difference between them. So basically the thought needed to decide what type of chocolate you're going to get may be completely unnecessary.

In the end I decided on using my first introduction, the original one that I wrote when we were first given our food paper assignment. My reasoning for this was because I think that it really made my point clear. For example I wanted people to understand that whether or not Chocolate Companies display their product differently, they all generally taste the same and I strongly believe that this introduction allows readers to see that.